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2015年11月21日雅思大作文范文(升级版)

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  20151121a

  In some societies, the role of a mother differs in some ways from the role of a father. Why do you think these differences exist? How might the parental role develop in the future?

  Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

  Write at least 250 words.

  话题分析

  这个题目很恶心,写着写着我和犹太崽都感觉到了莫名的男权女权陷阱。首先题目出得太专业,也就是偏,我查了社会学历史学人类学好几种文献才综合出来第一段的观点(好了我知道你们想说我蠢但是你咬我嘛)。其次这个题目对专业背景知识要求不低;再者题目要求讨论的是为什么不同,而不是有哪些不同,网上好多你们雅思界老师出的范文都跑题了啊喂!!!(说得跟我自己没教过雅思似的…)。你可以尝试稍微讨论下他们的不同点,但是着重要阐述这些不同的原因啊魂淡!

  素材来源

  唉不说了说多了都是泪,自己看篇末链接,这只是我看过的20多个素材中比较简单直观可以和大家分享的几个。但是可以很放心说这篇文章的深度要远高于一般雅思写作文章,如果调整文献格式和充实文章内容,会是一篇可以高分飞过的大学论文作业。(哎呀是真的啦观点都比较有深度的~)

  单独说明下,以后我也不会再说了。如果词句很好的话,我是基本不动来源的,就是俗称的粘贴复制。但是要注意一点,我的主要目的是把地道生动的观点和词句用法贯穿在全文中,为了让各位对英语言学术写作有更深刻的认知,且我的雅思范文不做发表用途,所以不要认为是剽窃(哎呀我很忙的尤其这段在做大thesis的文献综述部分各位体谅下啦)。但我也尽量把每次范文的重复率控制在25%以下。请记住,在各位的大学作业中,千万不要不加改写便直接引用超过5个词的原文,除去有双引号的引用(quotation)外,本科生重复率不得超过15%-20%(每个学校规定不同),研究生5%,博士生0%(苦逼…)

  范文Model answer

  Introduction (背景句加文章写作结构安排)

  Two to three centuries ago, fathers’ roles were primarily to serve asbreadwinners (n. 养家糊口的人) and the conveyers of moral values (道德观的输送者) and religious education to their children, while mothers tended to spend more of their time directly caring for the offspring (n. 后代) through feeding. How and why the differences between being a mother and father exist will first be discussed in this essay, followed by analysis on what future parental roles might become.

  Body paragraph 1 (阐述两个偏差成因)

  The current main reason for this difference is that the perception (n. 感知;看法) of a mother and a father differentiates (v. 区分;差别) due to regional and cultural varieties (区域和文化差异). Historically, men frompatriarchal societies(父系社会) hold positions of power: heads of the family unit, leaders of social groups, bosses in the workplace, and heads of government. This collectively held view (这个普遍的观点) has been strongly influencing the role of a mother and father for hundreds of years and although such traditional definition has been criticised (v. 批判) for years, in some Asian countries (e.g. China, Japan, and India), a mother is still considered as nurturing role (抚育角色) and is instilled (v. 逐渐灌输) with ideas that they should focus on the housework and children’s family education while a father should earn money, provide both love and strength, protection and physical security to the children and the family. The distinct (adj. 明显的;独特的) role differences in these societies are hard to change in the short term. Additionally, some recent studies revealed (vt. 透露;显示) that the different roles of mothers and fathers are influenced by genetics (n. 基因;遗传). Scholars showed how variation in where males and females put their parenting effort reflects different genetic influences for each sex.

  Body paragraph 2 (阐述未来发展趋势)

  In more recent decades, the changing economic role of women has greatly impacted the role of fathers. A study analysed that between 1948 and 2001, the percentage of working-age women employed or looking for work nearly doubled - from less than 33 percent to more than 60 percent. Their increase in financial power (财力) made paternal financial support less necessary for some families. In tandem with (串联) the growing autonomy (n. 自治;自主) and independence of women, related trends such as declining fertility (生育率下降), rising rates of divorce and remarriage (离婚与再婚率上升), and childbirth outside of marriage (婚外生育) have resulted in a transition (n. 过渡;转变) from traditional to multiple undefined roles for many fathers. Today’s fathers have started to take on roles vastly different from fathers of previous generations and either for mothers. We can expect these trends to continue and/or increase into the future. Society does not seem to want to define rigid gender roles within parenting anymore, especially with the rise in untraditional marriage forms (such as gay marriage) being legalised throughout the world where roles for each parent are not defined.

  Conclusion (总结文章主要观点+提出见解)

  In conclusion, two reasons, from the historical and cultural, and genetic studies – are discussed to try to explain the differences between a mother and father. However, I think no matter how the parenting style develops, the parents arestillobliged to (有责任去) contribute to their children’s health and well-being by maintaining a healthy relationship with the other parent even in cases of divorce; providing emotional and financial support, appropriate monitoring and discipline; and most importantly by remaining a permanent (adj. 永久的) andloving presence (爱的存在) in their lives.

  (512 words)

  常识解析

  · patriarchal societies:

  父系氏族社会。英语中Patriarchy可指父权、父权体制、家长制家长统治。在中文语境下通常并未严格区分三者,父权与家长统治、父权制/体制混用。探讨父权必须探讨权力的本质。父权与父权体制、父权思想、家长制等等名词常遭混用,在台湾书籍中也经常交互使用,然而仍有若干指涉重心上的差异。基本上,父权强调的是以特定性别为中心的权力运作形式;父权思想则是顺由权力运作模式所产生、以男性为中心的思想;父权体制则指涉父权这种权力运作发展出完善的政经社文制度以持续父权的运作与优越地位。至于家长制则是比较具争议性的翻译。肇因于英文本身顺应各国民情而国内会顺应当地文化而翻作家长制,然而家长在中文词性上具有相对中立的词性。事实上英文所指涉的无疑的就是父权的家父长制,然而家长制此一翻译忽略了性别意涵。在一个父权社会里,一个大家族的家族领袖会是一个男性长老实行其威权专制,或者从这点扩展出去,一个社会的统治阶级或政府是由年长的男性来主导。有人认为,如同母权,严谨的父权体制并不存在。 父权是指当男性在某个社会结构中占有相对的支配地位。在一个父权社会里,一个大家族的家族领袖会是一个男性长老实行其威权专制,或者从这点扩展出去,一个社会的统治阶级或政府是由年长的男性来主导。如同母权,目前人类社会并不存在严谨定义的父权体制,权力的变换是交替的。注意即使是父权体制也会有相当凄惨的男性出现,他们甚至被选择性的遗忘。

  20151121b

  Too much emphasis has been put on going to university for academic study. We should encourage more people to receive vocational training because of the needs for tradespeople like plumbers (n. 水管工) and electricians (n. 电工). To what extent do you agree?

  Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

  Write at least 250 words.

  话题分析

  去蓝翔还是去清北这种事儿终于出现在雅思作文中了。吐槽下,咋大中国的职业技校认证体系和欧美澳有质的区别,还是别作比较了。不过国外社会经济学对中国技校毕业就业等研究还是挺多的。咳咳,扯远了,这次要写的是认不认同鼓励人们接受职业培训。哦对了我知道你们很多人都不认识题目中那两词所以给你们标注了(真是不要太贴心地打脸~)

  素材来源

  全部在链接中,基本都是从里面摘抄改编的观点~这篇文章的用词(包括我其他文章的用词)都在精准地道而不在大长难,这也是学术写作中用词的精髓,请大家好好体会。

  范文Model answer

  Introduction (背景句加文章写作目的)

  In recent decades, it has become almost required for young people to go onto higher education at universities. However, although it has long been a government objective to reach the current level of university attendance, there is a school of thought (一种观点) which says that the government is now educating too many young people to degree level and that those same youngsters, and the job market, would be better served by a greater focus on vocational training. I think people should make decisions based on their strengths, interests andpersonal preferences (个人偏好).

  Body paragraph 1 (大学教育原因及过渡)

  Some students are clearly suited to (适合于) the academic route (学术路线) of a university degree, and if they have a particular career in mind which demands thislevel of qualification (资格水平), then they should receive every encouragement to follow their chosen path. University offers an academic experience. University education provides students with broad knowledge and basic skills to serve as the foundation for further learning and on-the-job training. However, some suspect that an academic education exploresthe theoretical and hypothetical(理论和假设的东西), but is not necessarily practical, realistic or directly useful.

  Body paragraph 1 (职业教育原因)

  Vocational training has a distinctly different educational focus as it is aimed at delivering practical, job specific skills. By pursuing (v. 追逐;接受) a technical-vocational education, firstly, different levels of courses should teach students the specialized and practical job-related knowledge and skills they need to know to perform a particular job role. Vocational training has expanded beyond the scope of trades to encompass industries (超出商业范围扩大到产业) such as information technology, tourism, retail, cosmetics, healthcare, childcare, management and business. Second, learners are often more in-line (adj. 内嵌的;嵌入的) with the job market needs leading to increased employment. For example, in some Latin American countries, data show that at least in the graduate’s first years, technical graduates usually have better employment opportunities than university graduates, especially in the context of recent economic reactivation (经济复苏).

  Conclusion (总结文章主要观点)

  In conclusion, after examining the pros and cons of pursuing a university degree or a course of vocational training. With inconclusive (adj. 不确定的) results over which type of education is better for lifetime success, I think much of it comes down to personal choice, career aspirations, and talent. However, we cannot ignore a fact that employers are increasingly requesting a greater element of vocational training be introduced alongside academic studies.

  (367 words)

  常识解析

  · the theoretical andhypothetical: 英语中形容词是可以做名词使用的。但是其实真正的秘密是:the+形容词表示形容词对应的名词这种用法其实是省略了形容词后面的名词啊啊啊啊!所以这句话其实是省略了things, topics等等等等东西的。

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